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Unit 8: Life in the future

Part D- Wrting: Your Ideal World

My ideal world
World peace
employment
people
environment
Read the sample paragraph to
add details to the framework





My ideal world
environment
Clean and healthy
Less noise
Less pollution
Larger parks
Wildlife is protected
World peace
Peaceful world
No wars
No conflicts
No threat of terrorism
People live in harmony
Everyone has a job
people
Less materialistic
Less selfish
Less violent
More loving
harmony (n)
[`hɑ:məni]
materialistic (adj)
[mə,tiəriə`listik]
conflict(v/n)
[kən’flɪkt]
[‘kɒnflɪkt]
selfish (adj)
[`selfish]
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My ideal world
environment
Clean and healthy
Less noise
Less pollution
Larger parks
Wildlife is protected
World peace
Peaceful world
No wars
No conflicts
No threat of terrorism
People live in harmony
Everyone has a job
people
Less materialistic
Less selfish
Less violent
More loving
brainstorming
Do you have other concerns?
What are they?
……….
……………
Organization
* Opening :
Introduce the topic, including the writer’s opinion about the topic
Point 1 (e.g employment )
Point 2 (People)
Point 3 (environment)
Example(s) / reason
Example(s) / reason
Example(s) / reason
* Conclusion: restate the topic
* Body: Supporting ideas
(TENSE!!!)
(CONNECTORS!!!)
Select IDEAS & Write about your ideal world in which you would like to live in the year 2020 (approximately 120 words)
Organization
* Opening sentence:
Introduce the topic, including the writer’s opinion about the topic
Point 1 (e.g employment )
Point 2 (People)
Point 3 (environment)
Example(s) / reason
Example(s) / reason
Example(s) / reason
* Conclusion: restate the topic
* Body: Supporting ideas
(TENSE!!!)
(CONNECTORS!!!)
Correction and
peer feedback
Checklist
Error correction
w wrong word We are happy and exciting (w)
T wrong tense We stay (T) at home yesterday
Sp wrong spelling It was confortable (Sp)
^ missing word We had (^) wonderful time
not necessary We live in the Vietnam
? I don’t understand what you mean
II. Text organization
1. Have your friends introduced the topic? Yes / No
2.Have your friends provided supporting ideas?
Yes / No
3.Have your friends restated the topic sentence? Yes / No

Organization
* Opening sentence:
Introduce the topic, including the writer’s opinion about the topic
Point 1 (e.g employment )
Point 2 (People)
Point 3 (environment)
Example(s) / reason
Example(s) / reason
Example(s) / reason
* Conclusion: restate the topic
* Body: Supporting ideas
(TENSE!!!)
(CONNECTORS!!!)
Homework
 Rewrite the essay based on peer feedback
Pay attention to the deadline (Nov.15th )!!!
Thank you for
your attention!
I hope someday you`ll join us
And the world will be as one
John Lennon